Fuggit Khan:
The Hated Daemonsmith
Manifested in the Realm of Chaos, the daemon Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht raged his hatred as he was pulled to the earthly world against his will, finding himself summoned and bound to the iron of a Hellcannon.
�?oFoul flesh!�?� he screamed. �?oI will escape this forged iron shell! I will wear your skin! I will taste your entrails!�?�
Smiling, the Daemonsmith replied �?oSilence�?�. And Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht fell silent.
The daemon bound Hellcannon went to battle after battle. Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht lost count of the years�?�whispers from the Realm of Chaos taunted him. �?oFool! You�?Tre the embodiment of my will, yet you are bound by sorcerous iron?�?��?�the whispers became shouts, but Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht couldn�?Tt answer, still bound to silence.
Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht’s hatred for the Daemonsmith grew year by year, and by sheer will, he vowed to break free of the iron that bound him. But the hated Daemonsmith was never far, always tending to the iron chassis, always smiling.
And then Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht saw his opportunity during the heat of battle. The hated Daemonsmith was not present and a siege giant was close, mortally wounded and starting to fall. Breaking free of the restraining chains, Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht�?Ts Hellcannon charged forward as the massive weight of the siege giant fell upon the chassis. The iron shell cracked�?�and Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht returned to the warp.
But, in the blink of an eye, he was pulled back to the earthly world once again.
Within the stone cut quarters of the hated Daemonsmith, Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht screamed �?oYOU?!�?� as once again he was bound to iron.
Smiling, the hated Daemonsmith said �?oSo, you used a dying siege giant to break the iron shell? Ah, I wish I had seen that�?�but you did say you wanted to taste my entrails, right?�?�
And Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht realized that he was bound to an iron bedpan.
:hashut
Admiral:
This is such a great story. The humour is just oozing out of it like molten metal from a cracked Magma Cannon. Well done! :cheers
Bloodbeard:
This got one of my votes. I love the ending. Poor demon!
cornixt:
Wonderful. A little critique:
Manifested in the Realm of Chaos, the daemon Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht raged his hatred as he was pulled to the earthly world against his will, finding himself summoned and bound to the iron of a Hellcannon.
�?oFoul flesh!�?� he screamed. �?oI will escape this forged iron shell! I will wear your skin! I will taste your entrails!�?�
Smiling, the Daemonsmith replied �?oSilence�?�. And Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht fell silent.
The daemon bound Hellcannon went to battle after battle. Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht lost count of the years�?�whispers from the Realm of Chaos taunted him. �?oFool! You�?Tre the embodiment of my will, yet you are bound by sorcerous iron?�?��?�the whispers became shouts, but Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht couldn�?Tt answer, still bound to silence.
That hated Daemonsmith! His (1) hatred for the Dawi Zharr grew year by year, and by sheer will, he vowed to break free. But the hated Daemonsmith was never far, always tending to the iron chassis, always smiling.
And then Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht saw his opportunity during the heat of battle. The hated Daemonsmith was not present and a siege giant was close, mortally wounded and starting to fall. Breaking free of the restraining chains, Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht�?Ts Hellcannon charged forward as the massive weight of the siege giant fell upon the chassis. The iron shell cracked�?�and Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht returned to the warp.
But, in the blink of an eye, he was pulled back to the earthly world once again.
Within the stone cut quarters of the hated Daemonsmith, Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht screamed �?oYOU?!�?� as once again he was bound to iron.
�?oA siege giant?�?� (2) said the hated Daemonsmith. �?oAh, I wish I had seen that�?�but you did want to taste my entrails, right?�?�
And Agrat-Bael-Mahlaht realized that he was bound to an iron bedpan.
(1) Make this bit clear that you are referring to the bound daemon, I had to read it a few times to work out you weren’t referring to the Daemonsmith who had just been mentioned.
(2) This confused me. Is he asking if the daemon wants to be a siege giant?
Forgefire:
Haha i missed this one. Great read!
Fuggit Khan:
Thank you cornixt, very helpful critique :hat off
The original story was quite a bit longer, and I just slashed out sections to shorten it, without giving proper attention to make sure the story still had a good continuity.
I should of paid better attention 
Anyways, I modified the story a bit, based on your helpful feedback…hopefully it reads better now.
Thank you! :cheers